vacivity.livejournal.com ([identity profile] vacivity.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] imaginedyou 2007-10-09 03:30 am (UTC)

Second person is still working pretty well for this; you're handling it pretty well so far.

I'll admit I got a bit confused near the end, especially with the seating stuff, but rereading it helped. Your descriptions of seemingly random things - the echoes, the hair fluttering in the wind - are gorgeous and really seem to suit it very nicely.
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