Oh, that's why it ends where it does; I don't plan to use the style all the way through at all, I knew that'd be way impossible ;) It kind of supports the way I have of (over)using commas and using multiple descriptive words for an action anyway, so it won't be completely LOST in the future, just toned down. It was for impact, and it's done its job ;)
I think because it's me writing it I know how I would personally pace it when reading. And if it doesn't come across well enough, well I can adjust it in the future! :) That's why I like the opinion on things.
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I think because it's me writing it I know how I would personally pace it when reading. And if it doesn't come across well enough, well I can adjust it in the future! :) That's why I like the opinion on things.
And I will work on it :P Shut up :P